ripples #50 ~ a renga

Ripples ~ This renga is a collaborative  writing effort of David of The Skeptic’s Kaddish and me, Sangeetha of Mindfills. David’s words, completing the tanka, are in italics and in bold. What started with this  haiku, is now a renga of 50 verses 🙂 which makes it a Gojuin!

ripples #50

beyond the brink
melting moments and lifetimes
~ I sleep into you
forms fading, dreams displacing
~ souls slowly slip together



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written in response to

sighing so softly
trailing tender tremors
my soul surrenders
touched by thin, teasing tendrils
you’re sweetly, softly seduced

We invite you to read all of the 50 ripples here ☺️ and you can read what David has written all about our journey here!
Lots of love and gratitude to you all for reading and your kind words of appreciation. 🙏

isn’t just pretty to think so

one happily ever after
the only place to go
just the two of us together
isn’t it pretty to think so
when we close our eyes
and imagine our forever

when we laugh without knowing why
and open every door
to let all of the love inside
our universe of crayon dreams
~a home called you and I
it is as simple it seems

the only place to go
when we close our eyes
and open every door
~a home called you and I
isn’t just pretty to think so
It is the only place I know

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This poem has been posted earlier on Mindfills using a line from Hemmingway. I’m submitting this one for Free verse revolution submission – on Home.

The poetry form is called the Dandizette described on poetscollective.com as

3 six line stanzas
the form is partially inspired by the villanelle, and features a tricky repetition of four refrain lines in the final stanza.
the syllable count for the first twostanzas  is  8/6/8/8/6/8.
The last stanza has lines of  6/6/6/6/8/8 syllables.
The rhyme scheme is ababcb cbcdcd bcbcee. (ababcbcbcdcdbcbcee)
The final stanza is composed of lines 2, 5, 8, 11 from the previous two stanzas, plus a concluding rhyming couplet.

sky stays ~ a kasa

sky stays blue, bathing the pond
a cloud drifts past hurriedly

etched on a park bench are our letters
random signs of the universe

midnight pauses as if she cares
which stars to pick for today

you don't notice when I'm here
you won't notice when I'm gone

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dVerse’s Poetics – hosted by Sanaa – The korean Kasa. Thank you Sanaa for introducing this poetic form on dVerse 🙏 & for Eugi’s weekly prompt – midnight

The elements of the Kasa, (song-words) are:

1. syllabic, 7-syllable lines broken by caesura into alternating groups of 3 and 4 syllables or 8 syllable lines broken by caesura into equal 4 syllable phrases.  These options are guides with variables at the discretion of the poet.  

2. strophic.  Groups of variable numbers of lines as opposed to uniform stanzas.

3. content is described or exposed through parallels. This is the heart of the form.

4. written from unrequited love, patriotism, daily life, nostalgia, etc

I was curious to know why there’s not much on this poetry form. A wordpress site has this to say about the gasa/kasa.

ripples #49 ~ a renga

sighing so softly
trailing tender tremors
my soul surrenders


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Written in response to

evening sky blushes
curling pink whispers of cloud
into silent words
cirrus clouds spell I LOVE YOU
for juicy peach setting sun

Ripples ~ a renga, is a collaborative  writing effort of David of The Skeptic’s Kaddish and me of Mindfills. David’s words, completing the tanka, are in italics and in bold. What started with this  haiku,  is now a renga of 49 verses 🙂  You can read all of the 49 ripples here ☺️ and you can read all about our journey  here and here.
Lots of love and gratitude to you all for reading and your kind words of appreciation. 🙏